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Thanks for contacting me! I hope you find my quick words helpful. The aspect that stands out the most for me here is the vision: it's a...


Hey there Jason, I’m back again from #GrammarNaziCritiques Since you’ve said that this is a true story, I’m sort of wary about critiqui...


:devgrammarnazicritques: here. I’m Ed, and I’ll be writing some detailed feedback on your work. I love the title, I think it works well...


Hey there, sorry it’s take me a while to get to this! But I said I’d read through it, and I have. I’ll start off by saying that you hav...

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Proofreading and Editing for Literature


Hello there, my name is Ed and I work as a proofreader of prose literature here on deviantART. I've been editing short stories and novels for many years, but have only recently discovered how many pieces there are uploaded to dA. So far, I've critiqued over 200 pieces.

I will critique:
-Short stories
-Chapters Novels
-Scripts
-Poems
-Comics

I will not critique:
-Fan fiction (unless I've been contacted and I know of the subject)

Here are a few examples of my work:


Have a look through my Critiqued Literature Gallery to see everything I've proofread on deviantART: here!

Rates
Because of how varied different literature pieces can be, my rates vary. Generally, the cost ranges between:
Note: There is no flat rate that many other editors charge.
  • $2-3 (£1.50) per 1,000 words.
  • $5 (£3) per 1,000 words for pieces needing more depth/time.
  • Poems vary within this price range depending on length.
  • There may be a discount for full length novels (contact me for more details).

The Process
If you would like hire me under these conditions then the first step would be to send me a 'sample' of your work, along with how much detail you'd like from the critique (rewrite, comments only, grammar, suggestions, character work, narrative structure...) I will read through the sample (first chapter etc) and gauge how long it will take, as well as offering a price. If you are happy with that price and estimated time I will send you my paypal details. 
For one-off pieces: Half the agreed payment is sent before I start work, half once you have received the edited script.
For chaptered novels: After the first chapter is returned, payment for that chapter is sent. From then on, all payments should be sent before any more chapters are edited.

I prefer to work using the comments system on Microsoft Word, but I'm just as happy to use dA's commenting system to send your critique.

All rights to the work remain the property of the original author (you). All I ask is that I'm mentioned in any references to editing or general assistance :) (Smile)

If you have any questions feel free to contact me here (note) or through my email: edward.dyer@me.com 


The Fallen Star


When I first started writing this story, I didn't realise where it was going to take me. I started off with just a few words scrawled on a piece of paper about 'the light of a fallen star', which I then lengthened into the beginning of a short project at school. But, when that was done, I really wanted to carry on and find out what was going to happen next.

I kept writing, and now over 250k words later, here I am! Of course, that's spread over four books I've written so far.

My goal throughout this series to create a whole new world, with new plants, animals, places. From the very start, I knew I didn't want to steal ideas from others, such as Elves, Dwarfs, Hobbits etc. For example, The Fallen Star takes place on Truaine, MAP UPDATED one of three planets that are referenced throughout the book.

The first book is now officially FINISHED


Chapter 1: fav.me/d5asm06
Chapter 2: fav.me/d5atfty
Chapter 3: fav.me/d5b16ue
Chapter 4: fav.me/d5b1i79
Chapter 5: fav.me/d5b6xwl
Chapter 6: fav.me/d5b6yfn
Chapter 7: fav.me/d5bbo4r
Chapter 8: fav.me/d5bbwl5
Chapter 9: fav.me/d5bcihg
Chapter 10: fav.me/d5c5hit
Chapter 11: fav.me/d5d1uka
Chapter 12: fav.me/d5dfmfl
Chapter 13: fav.me/d5edh3h
Chapter 14: fav.me/d5edmqs
Chapter 15: fav.me/d5edocs
Chapter 16: fav.me/d5edqrl
Chapter 17: fav.me/d5eh6kl
Chapter 18: fav.me/d5er5p6
Chapter 19: fav.me/d5fieho
Chapter 20: fav.me/d5firh4
Chapter 21: fav.me/d5fk0mx
Chapter 22: fav.me/d5fqtov
Chapter 23: fav.me/d5fvtzy
Chapter 24: fav.me/d5gyu89
Chapter 25: fav.me/d5gywkh
FIN.

The Fallen Star: Trapped Within Cover by TheFS

^^ The second book, The Fallen Star: Trapped Within, is underway...



TFS: Trapped Within is technically a two-parter, but will be uploaded as two 'books'. This means that the parts will be shorter than book one, but together, probably longer.

Chapter 1: fav.me/d5iurnv
Chapter 2: fav.me/d5j0onl
Chapter 3: fav.me/d5ju1wl
Chapter 4: fav.me/d5k1oiq
Chapter 5: fav.me/d5qv6j3
Chapter 6: fav.me/d5qvcoc
Chapter 7: fav.me/d5qvdxg
Chapter 8: fav.me/d6ptdhb
Chapter 9: fav.me/d7xxu2g
Chapter 10: fav.me/d7xxtia
Chapter 11: [Coming Soon]
Chapter 12: [Coming Soon]
Chapter 13: [Coming Soon]
Chapter 14: [Coming Soon]
Chapter 15: [Coming Soon]
Chapter 16: [Coming Soon]
Chapter 17: [Coming Soon]
Chapter 18: [Coming Soon]
Chapter 19: [Coming Soon]

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Characters


The Watchers
Rantil - The main character.
Lakor - Rantil's friend, and colleague
Hamsol - Rantil and Lakor's teacher. He is teaching them the skills of the Watcher.

Nichal
Saru - The leader of the village, Nichal
Ganarth - Second in command of the village
Bora - The Hunter
Qzen - The Doctor
Neetha - Rantil's neighbour
Neico - The Schoolteacher

Wrestek
Putoko - Rantil's best friend, when they were children
Yaneria - Putoko's sister

Siale
She - Leader of the Sett: the governing body of Truaine
Filoto - She's slave and cruel minion
Torku - Takes lead of the Council in the Watchers' absence

Ciameth
Kantou - Chalder from Ciameth, who comes to Truaine to correct a mistake she made
Ulmak - a powerful Ciamethian
Dawren - Kantou's father
Evron - Atarpa's brother

The Degarn (Book 3)
Atarpa - head of the Degarn, carries a great wisdom
Hungaru
Verrat
Taivas
Sile
Jinova

Demons
The Demon - a demon from Dremnor, who seeks revenge for the inprisonment of his race
The General - Head of the Demon Army, which invades Truaine

Others
Shieef - An old woman, living in the wilderness
Worral - A lost, alone man, who has kept and hidden the key to the Temple for many years
Bal'si - the Shaman of the Uraal-si'tu

There are plenty of other characters, but these are the important ones.

Activity


Hello there,

I am currently writing a 15,000 word stage script, based on the memories of a woman who suffers from amnesia after a crash. It focuses on keeping secrets and learning from the past. It will be sent as a docx file and should be annotated in return.

I would like some feedback, comments and some editorial suggestions. For this I am willing to pay US$75 (50), which would be transferred via paypal: $25 (15) sent with the script, and then up to $50 (35) upon completion.

I would like to see any other work that you've done before I commit to hiring you. This could be some in-depth critiques on DA or other work you've done elsewhere. The detail of your feedback will determine how much of the $50 you're sent after completion. I will be fair, but reserve the right to decline further payment if the feedback only offers general pointers or waffly comments that are unclear.

I would like you to comment on:
 Defined Characters and logical character decisions/actions
 Structure - in terms of logical chronology
 Unnatural dialogue
 Drops in pace
 Specific other comments

I would need your comments back by 5pm on Monday 31st August (BST).

Please get in touch with me via a note if you'd be able to help.

Thanks,
Ed

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Edward Dyer
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I've spent the last few years writing a full length novel called 'The Fallen Star'. I've reached a point where I really need some feedback, so I thought I'd come to one of the best known sites on the web =)

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