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Proofreading and Editing for Literature

Hello there, my name is Ed and I work as a proofreader of prose literature here on deviantART. I've been editing short stories and novels for many years, but have only recently discovered how many pieces there are uploaded to dA. So far, I've critiqued over 200 pieces.

I will critique:
-Short stories
-Chapters Novels

I will not critique:
-Fan fiction (unless I've been contacted and I know of the subject)

Here are a few examples of my work:

Have a look through my Critiqued Literature Gallery to see everything I've proofread on deviantART: here!

Because of how varied different literature pieces can be, my rates vary. Generally, the cost ranges between:
Note: There is no flat rate that many other editors charge.
  • $2-3 (£1.50) per 1,000 words.
  • $5 (£3) per 1,000 words for pieces needing more depth/time.
  • Poems vary within this price range depending on length.
  • There may be a discount for full length novels (contact me for more details).

The Process
If you would like hire me under these conditions then the first step would be to send me a 'sample' of your work, along with how much detail you'd like from the critique (rewrite, comments only, grammar, suggestions, character work, narrative structure...) I will read through the sample (first chapter etc) and gauge how long it will take, as well as offering a price. If you are happy with that price and estimated time I will send you my paypal details. 
For one-off pieces: Half the agreed payment is sent before I start work, half once you have received the edited script.
For chaptered novels: After the first chapter is returned, payment for that chapter is sent. From then on, all payments should be sent before any more chapters are edited.

I prefer to work using the comments system on Microsoft Word, but I'm just as happy to use dA's commenting system to send your critique.

All rights to the work remain the property of the original author (you). All I ask is that I'm mentioned in any references to editing or general assistance :) (Smile)

If you have any questions feel free to contact me here (note) or through my email: 

The Fallen Star

When I first started writing this story, I didn't realise where it was going to take me. I started off with just a few words scrawled on a piece of paper about 'the light of a fallen star', which I then lengthened into the beginning of a short project at school. But, when that was done, I really wanted to carry on and find out what was going to happen next.

I kept writing, and now over 250k words later, here I am! Of course, that's spread over four books I've written so far.

My goal throughout this series to create a whole new world, with new plants, animals, places. From the very start, I knew I didn't want to steal ideas from others, such as Elves, Dwarfs, Hobbits etc. For example, The Fallen Star takes place on Truaine, MAP UPDATED one of three planets that are referenced throughout the book.

The first book is now officially FINISHED

Chapter 1:
Chapter 2:
Chapter 3:
Chapter 4:
Chapter 5:
Chapter 6:
Chapter 7:
Chapter 8:
Chapter 9:
Chapter 10:
Chapter 11:
Chapter 12:
Chapter 13:
Chapter 14:
Chapter 15:
Chapter 16:
Chapter 17:
Chapter 18:
Chapter 19:
Chapter 20:
Chapter 21:
Chapter 22:
Chapter 23:
Chapter 24:
Chapter 25:

The Fallen Star: Trapped Within Cover by TheFS

^^ The second book, The Fallen Star: Trapped Within, is underway...

TFS: Trapped Within is technically a two-parter, but will be uploaded as two 'books'. This means that the parts will be shorter than book one, but together, probably longer.

Chapter 1:
Chapter 2:
Chapter 3:
Chapter 4:
Chapter 5:
Chapter 6:
Chapter 7:
Chapter 8:
Chapter 9:
Chapter 10:
Chapter 11: [Coming Soon]
Chapter 12: [Coming Soon]
Chapter 13: [Coming Soon]
Chapter 14: [Coming Soon]
Chapter 15: [Coming Soon]
Chapter 16: [Coming Soon]
Chapter 17: [Coming Soon]
Chapter 18: [Coming Soon]
Chapter 19: [Coming Soon]

Please Write a Critique by LumiResources


The Watchers
Rantil - The main character.
Lakor - Rantil's friend, and colleague
Hamsol - Rantil and Lakor's teacher. He is teaching them the skills of the Watcher.

Saru - The leader of the village, Nichal
Ganarth - Second in command of the village
Bora - The Hunter
Qzen - The Doctor
Neetha - Rantil's neighbour
Neico - The Schoolteacher

Putoko - Rantil's best friend, when they were children
Yaneria - Putoko's sister

She - Leader of the Sett: the governing body of Truaine
Filoto - She's slave and cruel minion
Torku - Takes lead of the Council in the Watchers' absence

Kantou - Chalder from Ciameth, who comes to Truaine to correct a mistake she made
Ulmak - a powerful Ciamethian
Dawren - Kantou's father
Evron - Atarpa's brother

The Degarn (Book 3)
Atarpa - head of the Degarn, carries a great wisdom

The Demon - a demon from Dremnor, who seeks revenge for the inprisonment of his race
The General - Head of the Demon Army, which invades Truaine

Shieef - An old woman, living in the wilderness
Worral - A lost, alone man, who has kept and hidden the key to the Temple for many years
Bal'si - the Shaman of the Uraal-si'tu

There are plenty of other characters, but these are the important ones.
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Shyanne-Kai Featured By Owner Apr 14, 2013
Wow, this sounds really interesting, and it looks like you've put a lot of effort into it.
TheFS Featured By Owner Jun 15, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
For an 8-year project, it's certain taken a lot more effort than I ever thought it would =P
DarkHunterGirl1 Featured By Owner Oct 22, 2012
YAY!! I am SO proud!!
TheFS Featured By Owner Oct 23, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
I'm not sure I like the next cover yet; there's something about it I don't like.

But on the bright side, I've written around 10,000 words of the next book! It won't be long until I start uploading some new chapters

DarkHunterGirl1 Featured By Owner Oct 23, 2012
SO EXCITED!! I am super proud of you hun!!
Echoing-DelCrystal Featured By Owner Oct 14, 2012  Student General Artist
I too will read when I get the chance too. =3
XRosewaterX Featured By Owner Oct 6, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Awesome on finishing the chapters for your book! ^^ I'm almost done with posting the chapters for mine before I go through and edit it again XD
TheFS Featured By Owner Oct 6, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Editing it again?! I thought that's what you were doing this time? =p
XRosewaterX Featured By Owner Oct 6, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
When I say editing again, I mean mostly the first few chapters =P (namely 2, 3, and 4).
DarkHunterGirl1 Featured By Owner Oct 5, 2012
Congrats to my awesome beta for finishing your book! Way to go hun! I'm proud to have someone so awesome as my beta!!!
TheFS Featured By Owner Oct 5, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
XRosewaterX Featured By Owner Sep 30, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
This sounds exciting :) I'll make my way through your book when I can. I'm just sorry that a lot has been happening in my life >.<' In any case, I also wanted to say happy early birthday :)
TheFS Featured By Owner Oct 2, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Aww thanks =D

I've been a bit slack on reading yours lately too - I've just moved back to university so everything's a little up in the air at the moment (we don't even have internet at our house yet!)
XRosewaterX Featured By Owner Oct 2, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
You're welcome ^^ And it's ok I understand how that is. :) And wow, that sucks :( I've been there without internet for almost half a year and it's terrible >.<' Especially if you're a gamer like me =B
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