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Day 28 - Tomorrow by TheFS, literature

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Day 28 - Tomorrow

Tomorrow by Edward Dyer Day 28/28 Note. Whenever a character speaks, a spotlight lights them. The chatter of a busy street. TOURIST (Repeated) Excuse me. Excuse me. Excuse me. Sorry. Can I just… Excuse me. Excuse me. Sorry. Presented on the stage is a single chair surrounded by a circle of another eight chairs, facing the audience. ADAM sits on the central chair, while the ENSEMBLE sit around the circle in the following order (clockwise, beginning at the chair furthest UCS): 1 – TOURIST 2 – GIRL 3 – BOSS 4 – empty, except for a 7-year-old girl’s backpack draped across the back 5 (DCS) – SISTER 6 &

Day 27 - Why? by TheFS, literature

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Day 27 - Why?

Why? by Edward Dyer Day 27/28 NOTE: Speech in brackets should not be spoken; they are for the actor’s benefit. A father and daughter. He is reading a newspaper. She is eating her dinner. - Daddy, I want some ice cream. - When you’ve finished your dinner, dear. - Daddy, Mum says you’re lazy. - You’ll be lazy one day, dear. - Daddy, this water tastes funny. - Stop drinking from the dog’s bowl, dear. - Daddy, where to babies come from? - Ask your mother, dear. - Daddy, am I an angel? - You are to me, dear. - Daddy, where does the sun go when it’s dark? - The sun needs sleep, too, dear. - Daddy, is that

Day 26 - Lemmings by TheFS, literature

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Day 26 - Lemmings

Lemmings by Edward Dyer Day 26/28 Two actors are sitting on the edge of a cliff. They look down below for a moment. Then up. Down. Up. At each other. YES. I’ve heard about lemmings. NO. Lemmings? YES. They all follow each other off cliffs. If one jumps, then so do all the rest. NO. I’m not sure that’s exactly true. YES. Yes. Yes it is. NO. No. No it’s not. YES. I can think of 250 ways that cats could commit suicide. NO. But only 241 ways in which they could. YES. Yes. NO. Taking into account the first 9 lives they wasted trying, and failing, that leaves them with only 241. YES. I agreed with you. NO. Except that’

Day 25 - 50 Things by TheFS, literature

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Day 25 - 50 Things

50 Things by Edward Dyer Day 25/28 A row of actors behind a desk filled with paper. They take turns to pick up a piece of paper. The following statements can be read in any order. - Being ignored when you’re in a hurry and don’t have the time for this shit - When you’re talking to a liar and you know they’re lying, but you can’t tell them you know they’re lying and you have to keep pretending you don’t know. - Failing at something when you’ve tried really hard. - Critical people who have no idea when they’re giving you feedback. - When you’re accused of something things you didnR

Day 24 - The Fountain by TheFS, literature

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Day 24 - The Fountain

The Fountain by Edward Dyer Day 24/28 The stage is split in two. Stage Left there is a fountain, freely pumping water. Stage Right are two men, BALSI and MAMARI. BALSI has a horrific wound on his head from falling rocks. BALSI. Ca. (cough) Ah ca’ta. MAMARI. Osa n-sae ca ut. BALSI. Mamari? MAMARI. Oma. BALSI. S-isa n-li. MAMARI. Ah graa. N-ul gu si’vorr, Balsi. BALSI breathes deeply. His eyes flicker open and closed. MAMARI. Balsi? BALSI mumbles. Al hiir ah! Al ah! Graa osa ras ut. BALSI. Osa bit ras. MAMARI. Oma. BALSI. Hiir’mirr. Osa bit ras hiir’mirr. Ras osa… marl. MAMARI. Oma. Osa bit ras hiir Mon’

Day 23 - Secrets and Lies by TheFS, literature

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Day 23 - Secrets and Lies

Secrets and Lies by Edward Dyer Day 23/28 JOSEPH ushers the audience through a library. He is looking for a particular rack. He finds it and begins looking over the spines of the books. JOSEPH. Her name’s Amber. I was working all night on my essay – the Late Heavy Bombardment. I’m doing geology. By the way. I’d been working on my essay, just over there, for a couple of hours, when she came by. Her beauty was worthy of spotted. You do know what spotted is, right? If anything happens in the library that’s so amazing, or so outragous, you can post it annonomously on there. I’ve not been one of those guys b

Day 20 - Clear Water by TheFS, literature

Day 22 - OOMA by TheFS, literature

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Day 22 - OOMA

OOMA by Edward Dyer Day 22/28 SCENE ONE GEORGIA and JOHN are both on their way to work. JOHN is in a car, GEORGIA is taking the train. Lights up on JOHN. He is nervously tapping the dash board. JOHN. Pick up, pick up, pick… Lights up on GEORGIA. She answers her phone. GEORGIA. Hello. Yes? Yes. What do you want? I’m half way to work. JOHN. I know, so am I. But I’ve just had an incredible idea. You know. I’ve mentioned my dream before? Haven’t I? Ever since I was little, I’ve always wanted to do it. George? GEORGIA. The chocolate bar thing? Right? JOHN. Yes, the chocolate bar thing. Well I think I’

Day 21 - Morning Coffee by TheFS, literature

Day 19 - Racing Hearts by TheFS, literature

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Day 19 - Racing Hearts

Racing Hearts by Edward Dyer Day 19/28 INT. JACK’s BEDROOM – AUTUMN, PRESENT DAY, EARLY MORNING Light shines through the window. JACK’s bedroom is messy, and filled with all manner of racing posters, toys and duvet covers. There is a large poster of AYRTON SENNA above his bed. JACK is standing in front of a full-length mirror. His mother, CAROL, is brushing down the white shirt he’s wearing. They both look in the mirror. JACK smiles; CAROL is close to tears. FLASHBACK: SIX DAYS EARLIER INT. HALLWAY – NIGHT CAROL is sitting on the stairs, caught in the faint light of the TV, casting shadows of the banisters ove

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Imagine by TheFS, literature

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Imagine

Imagine. You are six years old. Your sister is four years older than you. She comes into the room, shouting to you about an 'amazing idea' she's had. You're young. You don't know that really: she's an idiot. It takes you another few years to figure that one out, anyway. She explains how plastic bags can be used to slide around if you put them on your feet. You agree, and you think it is one of the most revolutionary ideas you've ever heard. It's something you'll remember for the rest of your life. You start to get excited. You are six years old. Your mum keeps a drawer in a small utility room, filled with bags from Safeways and some more e

Resolution Diary by TheFS, literature

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Resolution Diary

2007 Resolution: Make first million after starting own business. Progress: :bulletblack: Applied for a loan. Declined due to excessive account activity. Note: Constant purchasing of rare (albeit mint) wicker chairs is not conducive to bank balance. Wife insistent on selling wicker chairs to find money to start business. :bulletblack: Bought new donut recipe book. Learnt how to make category hard donut, 'Diamond Swizzler'. Delma loves them. :bulletblack: James offered to lend the money if he can become a business partner. Potential. :bulletblack: First million still a long way off. Wife still nagging. :bulletblack: Spent savings on replacing

Uraal-si'tu Language by TheFS, literature

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Uraal-si'tu Language

Desert Names All of these places can be found on the Map of Truaine. Sayrath'Barr - Life's centre by water Ul'asmirr Sands - Great second sun Baal'si Bay - Calm waters always Caves of Marl'uh - Above lost Marl'ti Cliffs - Below lost Mol'ulmal - Great never-ending land Carall'ulmal - Great never-ending free water Uraal-si'tu - The Uraal, always balanced Ca'n-sae Valley - Water not present Formatting n- - opposite meaning of the following word/not s- - possession Dictionary A ah - oneself ah'n-osa - you (stranger - not in tribe) al - words/speech as – two B Baal – the state of water during no wind, silent/calm water barr ̵

Divergent Echo by TheFS, literature

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Divergent Echo

Isolated. Silence. I opened my eyes. I could no longer contain my tears. The darkness of the shadows was overwhelming. They were pressuring in on my mind, and even my thoughts were shrouding over with a veil of thick, impenetrable smoke. All the memories I had of before were gone. I couldn't remember why I felt so alone. I couldn't remember why my feet were cold and my hands were sore. I only wanted to think of one thing, to be free of the tunnel. To be away from the pain that was surrounding me: the fog of the unknown. I wanted to be away from it all. Away from the darkness. Through my despair I tried to calm myself. I continued walking

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I've spent the last few years writing a full length novel called 'The Fallen Star'. I've reached a point where I really need some feedback, so I thought I'd come to one of the best known sites on the web =)

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Aug 11, 2012

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Proofreading and Editing for Literature Hello there, my name is Ed and I work as a proofreader of prose literature here on deviantART. I've been editing short stories and novels for many years, but have only recently discovered how many pieces there are uploaded to dA. So far, I've critiqued over 200 pieces. I will critique: -Short stories -Chapters Novels -Scripts -Poems -Comics I will not critique: -Fan fiction (unless I've been contacted and I know of the subject) Here are a few examples of my work: Betwixt His Study Part I by !sherlockholmes34 The Nova Series: Rift ch. 1 by ~SeventhRain TSD - One by *XRosewaterX Have a look throu

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Feb 6, 2015

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Oct 5, 2014

Can't complain.

Writing isn't going as smoothly as once it did, but those things happen. I'm getting a bit tired of the current storyline and I just want to conclude it. Only very vague ideas yet of what the next is going to be.

On the positive side, I am revising and compiling the material for the second book, which I think may actually be finished by the end of the month. Which is a lot faster than I thought, because quite honest, I've been doing that so long now, I thought it would never be finished. lol.

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Jun 26, 2014

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